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Ballad of my Love for You

My dear, today in English class
You turned your lovely head.
Your eyes met mine; I surely felt
My heart would be stopped dead.

The other kids, they laugh and jeer,
They are so cruel to me.
But you don't say those nasty things,
With you I'd rather be.

Shall I write this with trembling hands?
Reveal my secret love?
I'll say to you the things I feel,
My heart, you will know of.

I'll write this note for you alone,
My crush, for you to see;
I'll tell you of these things I love,
Together we should be.

Your eyes, they are so beautiful,
I want them in a jar.
Cut out with my ball-point pen, I'd
Always know where they are.

Your skin, so soft and gorgeous fair,
I long for its caress…
I'd love to feel your soft, soft skin,
Made into a new dress.

Your white teeth will my jewelry be,
So jealous are the girls,
Red in the face, they'll see your bone,
The brooch in my long curls.

Inside my head there are voices,
They tell me what to do.
They whisper "scratch,” and “burn," and "kill,"
But when they speak of you.

I have few friends at school lately,
Since I ripped out Jen's hair.
But of all those that I would kill,
My crush, you I would spare.

I know they call me crazy, dear,
And maybe it is true.
But if they're right and I am mad,
Know it's because of you.

Let's take the world by storm, my dear.
What has our love to hide?
I’m Harley to your Joker, Love,
I’m Bonnie to your Clyde.

So join me, ride the flying bear!
Your head, he floats above.
The voices say that's what happens
When crazies fall in love....

A ballad of love... only maybe not so much? ;)

Written about a year ago for a slam poetry contest in high school and editing once more for my Creative Writing class in college, this work still makes me smile so I felt I had to share it sometime.
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You have such a wonderful way of describing this shy girl's love for this boy but if you'd like it to be at its strongest I would suggest instead of the surprise at the end, have the psycho element all the way through the poem. Or it may go the other way with it just being a poem about a regular girl but I get the feeling that's not what you want. This is the kind of poem where if you sit down and think about why the kids bully and when she says 'when crazies fall in love' that maybe he doesn't tease her because he might be just like her. Very well written.
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Wobbli Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm not sure, but someone please tell me, is it bad if I think that I could totally write something somewhat like this just to creep a random person out?
Girlfoxgirl Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2013  Student Writer
Haha. I am not quite sure how to respond to that. However I always support writing creepy things to creepy people out. ^^ So do it!
Prettykitty473 Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Ah, this speaks within the psycho on us all. Love is so simple, yet irrational, it can touch even the untouchable. Very well done. :)
Girlfoxgirl Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2013  Student Writer
Thanks very much. ^^ Glad it spoke to you, too. ;)
MarkTShaw Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Simple. Weak title. But you've got real potential with the content. Your phrasing and sense of rhyme shows you've got the ability to recgonize how to riff something in a new light. So you get a fave.
Girlfoxgirl Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2013  Student Writer
Thanks, man, that's wonderful input. Glad to have earned your fave! ^^
EmilyJanus Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
AH! I love this poem!
Girlfoxgirl Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2013  Student Writer
Thanks very much, man! ^^
EmilyJanus Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
No problem :llama:
TheUltimateHetaku Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013
i hope those feelings are not real.... then i'd have you wearing bones and skin and keeping eyes in a jar, BY GOD.
Girlfoxgirl Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Student Writer
=D Bahaha, not at all, just a clever slam poetry poem. Though you never know... ;) :shh:
TheUltimateHetaku Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013
*backs away into a corner, shuddering* o.o
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